Dr. Tick Tock

Thank you ^___^

Oh, thanks so much guys! Since most of you said this chapter was pointless, I'm revising it quite a bit. More description of the city will be given, Evalen's appearance ...

Another note before you begin (this is the second part of chapter one). I changed Asher's name to Kodi. For personal reasons, and also because there is a semi-new book ...

Okay, I promised I wouldn't post back in this one, but-- This isn't the prologue. I gave you a link back to the prologue, which I had posted previously on ...

Ohhh! Many many many thanks for the critique! It was amazingly helpful! I never noticed my long, adjective-suffocated sentences before, but I definitely see your point. I think it has ...

Wow! Thank you so much for the critique! ... Are we allowed to respond back to them? Oh, well... I changed "the sweating flesh of the sellers behind their booths" ...

I edited and posted Chapter One again for you guys, if you want to bother rereading it. I spent most of the morning reading, rereading, and editing minuscule problems. Feel ...

"In The Forests of the Night" and others by Amelia Atwater-Rhodes. Quick readings, too.

Thank you, Pork! That's actually the first official critique I've ever gotten. It really opens your eyes, doesn't it? I'll fix all those errors you pointed out. ... too late ...